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Morbidosity by ~p0371c--sU1c1d3:iconp0371c--sU1c1d3:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Fixed




Smell the poison on my breath
And taste it in my kiss
A drug designed to kill us both
So you I'll never miss

Potion master told me that
For you it would be fast
I would have to stand and watch
As you drew your last

But I was deceived by Potion-Man
And now you lie there dead
Then he claimed me as his own
And drug me to his bed

But I'd made a poison just for him
And this he didn't know
So morning after Deadly Night
I buried him below

I wept and wept for you
Then raised the dagger high
Brought it down into my heart
"I'm coming, Love." I sigh...
©2006-2009 ~p0371c--sU1c1d3
:iconp0371c--su1c1d3:

Author's Comments

Wooo. That's my word!! I don't exactly know why I decided to call it that. Took me forever to get the rhyme the way I wanted it. So grrr if you don't like it---don't bug me about it. I'm happy. For once. Attempt to ruin that and I will be forced to hurt you.
Stock is a picture of Belladonna...I think that stuff ish soooo NIFTEH!!

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:iconyourinspiringsoul31:
~yourINSPIRINGsoul31 Jun 13, 2006, 8:39:55 PM
;O;
:heart: Love love love love
=D Great job!! I love the rhyming pattern and the overall flow of the poem!
WOOT! =D

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[x] So many lies swirling
All around you
You're suffocating
The empty shape in you
Steals your breath
You're suffocating [x]
:iconp0371c--su1c1d3:
~p0371c--sU1c1d3 Jun 13, 2006, 8:47:54 PM
Hehe thank you. ^_^ It took me forever to get it "right". I rewrote it like....12 times. O___o But I'm very happy with the final piece---which I rarely am :glomp: THanks for the fabulous first comment :)
:iconyourinspiringsoul31:
~yourINSPIRINGsoul31 Jun 14, 2006, 5:34:07 PM
Wow, I don't think I've ever worke don a poem for that long O.o

No problem =D

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[x] So many lies swirling
All around you
You're suffocating
The empty shape in you
Steals your breath
You're suffocating [x]
:iconsaintlydark:
=SaintlyDark Jun 27, 2006, 11:54:55 AM
This is utterly beautiful, chilling.. sweet emotional plague.

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“One piece of his heart for every tear she granted..”
:iconp0371c--su1c1d3:
~p0371c--sU1c1d3 Jun 27, 2006, 3:47:22 PM
Thank you for the comment. :) :hug:
:iconsaintlydark:
=SaintlyDark Jun 27, 2006, 3:51:02 PM
You are welcome.

Shiney things!

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“One piece of his heart for every tear she granted..”
:iconp0371c--su1c1d3:
~p0371c--sU1c1d3 Jun 27, 2006, 3:56:38 PM
*grins* Shiney things definately rock XD
:iconsaintlydark:
=SaintlyDark Jun 27, 2006, 3:57:40 PM
Haha, definettly.

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“One piece of his heart for every tear she granted..”
:iconplsc:
~plsc Jul 15, 2006, 1:59:14 PM
that beautiful
and so sad
<3 pxx

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<3 remember to breath before it's too late </3
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